In some parts of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

Nowadays, couples face
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various difficulties and they should get ready for them. In some countries, the
divorce
rate has surged significantly in the past few decades. In the following paragraph, I will discuss
reasons
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and provide potential solutions. First of all,
financial
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crisis can be possibly one of the
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of
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divorce
rate. The cause of
this
issue
can be considered as the country’s inflation. Salary and earnings won’t
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with inflation.
Therefore
at
this
particular
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the problem will rises
due to
couple’s
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dissatisfaction
about
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the whole thing.
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, In
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the inflation rate is deteriorating every day. So, the majority of people face
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financial difficulties
specially
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the
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couples.
As a
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the couple have a tendency to
divorce
. to address the
issue
, governmental aid must
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in place in order to help couples
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their financial crisis.
secondly
, addiction to certain types of
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may
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to the couple’s
divorce
. If the life expectancy drops, they will have
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for a drug.
therefore
, their life will be imbalanced because
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one of the parties does not
want
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get away from their addiction.
For instance
, If one of the parties
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to a drug they may do some dangerous activities because they are mentally balanced. To address
this
problem, there are some
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consultants which the person may go there to fix the
issue
. In conclusion, life has many ups and downs and
full
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of surprises. The couple should consider that
divorce
is the not only option. First of
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they should try to fix the
issue
. if it does not work as to be expected
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may
divorce
.
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