The demand for food is increasing worldwide. Why has it happened? What measures could the international community take to improve the situation?

population congestion, Some countries in
Change the capitalization
Africa
show examples
africa
Change the capitalization
Africa
show examples
, set up
institution
Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
show examples
to distribute
food
The request for
food
is ramping up daily in all nations. There are multifarious reasons why
this
phenomenal
Replace the word
phenomenon
show examples
is happening. In the following essay, I will explain what the reason
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
, and provide some practical solutions for each
problems
Change to a singular noun
problem
show examples
. Overpopulation in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
urban
areas
could be one of the
reason
Change to a plural noun
reasons
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
why the
demand
is staggeringly high. Presently more and more
people
are going to immigrate from rural
areas
to urban
areas
.
Consequently
, the consumption of
food
will surge.
For example
, In Iran, many
people
from rural move to metropolitan cities
such
Tehran
Change preposition
as Tehran
show examples
, Isfahan, Shiraz etc to have more prosperity. To tackle
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the issue, the governments may set up some facilities and amenities in the rural
areas
to make the locals stay in their region so the urban
areas
will
no
Correct your spelling
not
show examples
be overpopulated.
Therefore
, the
demand
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
food
will be controlled with more ease. the consumption of
food
is uplifting daily. Today,
people
purchase more items than they actually need. So
this
would increase the
demand
for
food
because it will not be distributed evenly. Some
people
purchase more items
while
others will not.
For instance
, If oil will be taken by
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
minority of
people
, the country will face acute oil shortages in the country
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
show examples
therefore
the
demand
will go up. to address the issue, the government’s supervision
is become
Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
show examples
indispensable to control. So, if the production exceeds the
demand
, rationing could be
ideal
Add an article
an ideal
the ideal
show examples
situation to control the
food
. In conclusion, in both ways, establishing some facilities and improving amenities could be
ideal
Add an article
an ideal
the ideal
show examples
situation for locals, as it helps to prevent them migrating to urban
areas
.
Furthermore
, the
demand
goes up government take over the
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
situation by implementing simplified rationing the scarce items.
Submitted by mohammad.saffarian on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: