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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology.  In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?  Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Presently,
people
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interacting
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each
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 other through different methods
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 the rapid change
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technology
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. In the following essay, I will discuss how
technology
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 affects the types of
relationship
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 between
people
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 how it became a positive development for the
people
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. In
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Internet
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 make a huge
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 on
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people
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,
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interacting
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 with each other. Nowadays
people
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contact
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 each other through
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the internet
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internet
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 via many different applications.
People
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contact
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through
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 voice or video chat. It
enable
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 us to
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application
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that
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 of the social media
platform
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enable
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people
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 to
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with
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one
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 another. There are many beneficial advantages
in
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 the use of
technology
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One
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 of the upsides of the usage of
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 is that all of a bunch of useful information can be stored on
laptop
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the laptop
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for example
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 without concerning any loss of data.
that is
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one
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 way of using
technology
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. Another positive aspect of using
technology
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 is that
people
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 may be updated instantly with news.
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example
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 another social media called
instagram
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 makes a huge change in spreading the news
out
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. Another main benefit of using
technology
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 is that it enables
people
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 to make their financial transactions through
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internet
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. In conclusion,
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internet
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 is
one
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 branch of
technology
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, which changes the way
people
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 live. There are multifarious advantages
of
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technology
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Firstly
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people
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 are no longer should concern
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 loss of data because laptops
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taking
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 care of that issue.
Secondly
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,
people
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 may update instantly.
thirdly
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,
it
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people
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 are capable of doing their financial transactions via
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internet
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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