People in the modern world have a greater number of health problems compared to people in the past due to the fact that they have an unhealthy eating habit. Do you agree with the statement?

Nowadays, in spite of living in the most developed society ever, plenty of
people
in
world
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can still not avoid
health
issues
. Many arguments believe that modern
people
are dealing with more
health
problems
than previous generations because of unhealthy diets.
Although
eating in the past had its own
problems
and was able to cause diseases, I believe that current diets are really making more
issues
for
health
than eating habits in previous periods.
To begin
with, there were two main
issues
of eating during previous generations. The first was the freshness of
foods
. Unlike today, when
people
are able to use refrigerators and similar devices to preserve
foods
,
people
in the past did not have advanced methods to remain what they ate fresh.
As a result
, they could have digestive
issues
such
as stomachache and
diarrhea
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. Indeed,
although
not having refrigerators, ancient societies have various methods to preserve
foods
, and one of them was marination.
This
was an effective way of
food
preservation as salt could kill bacteria.
However
, salty
food
could result in another problem. They could make disorders
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kidneys
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since these body parts have to function as much as possible to eliminate the
amount
of salt.
Nevertheless
, modern diets are affecting
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health
more concerningly than in the past. In the past,
foods
were easy to get spoiled. As mentioned, the reason was ancient
people
do not have refrigerators, but it was not the only factor. Another factor is the main origin
food
of
these
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people
was
from
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nature. Meanwhile, at present,
a great deal of
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foods
are artificial. In
a processed
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processed food
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food
, there are many ingredients, including preservatives,
color
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additives and the so-called natural
flavors
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. All of them are the results of chemical production. That means a myriad of consumers have to deal with chemical ingredients when eating processed
foods
, which can cause
health
problems
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them. Another problematic aspect is the
amount
of
oil
cooked in many categories of
foods
. In the past, making
oil
was not simple as in general, there were no ways to
freezing
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and preserve it, which were essential as
oil
is flammable.
However
, in
modern
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world, a great
amount
of
oil
is produced and it is capable to freeze and preserve
this
liquid fat.
This
advancement is almost
simultanenous
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simultaneous
simultaneously
with the emergence of fast
food
and instant noodles. The consequence is plenty of consumers can have to use a remarkable
amount
of cooking
oil
in
food
.
This
situation results in many
health
problems
such
as heart
issues
, obesity, diabetes and heart stroke. Unfortunately, these
problems
can be more problematic in
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future.
To conclude
, despite
of
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the poor-quality preservation and salty
food
, which could cause
problems
to
digestive
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system and kidneys, ancient
people
did not have to deal with as many
health
issues
as
modern
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the modern
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world as nowadays, consumers can have to use a large
amount
of processed
food
containing chemical ingredients and a great deal of cooking
oil
in popular
foods
such
as fast
food
and instant noodles.
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