The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015

The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015
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The bar chart provides information about junk food consumption, between males and females of 4 different
age
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groups in 2015.
Overall
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of average consumed calories per day in the
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group
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of both
men
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and women from 18 to 34 was the highest,
whereas
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the same statistics were the lowest among individuals, who were over 65. Starting with looking at the percentage of the most popular
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, the number of
men
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was approximately 17 %,
while
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the number of women was 16%. With regards to
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following groups, percentages of
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men's
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men
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consumption of junk food , who were 35-49 and 50-64 were nearly 10 % and 9 % respectively. Regarding
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females statistics of eating unhealthy dishes among these two groups
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lower, than
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and was 9 %
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average. Another interesting
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group
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is elderly individuals, who were in the
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of over 65, the graph illustrated, that despite
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being very high in the first
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group
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, the statistics
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both females and males were extremely low, just above 4%
by
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men
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and almost 4% by women respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • fast food consumption
  • men
  • women
  • 2015
  • compare
  • contrast
  • differences
  • reasons
  • solutions
  • excessive
  • address
  • issue
  • recap
  • final thought
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