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Some people think it’s better to choose friends, who always have the same opinions, as them, other people believe it’s good to have friends, who sometimes disagree with them discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, it is strongly believed by
masses
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, that individuals ought to have
friends
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, who have the same way of logical thinking and almost identical ideas. At the same time, some people are sure that
friends
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 have to argue with them and have their own viewpoint.
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, from my perspective, as a person, who has many
friends
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 with different opinions, I believe that people should build friendships with others only if their views on life are opposite . In the following paragraphs, I will describe both sides and provide my own ideas and viewpoint. First of all, humans who are building friendships with others, who have similar
mindset
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 could benefit
in
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non-argue
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 atmosphere and good
relationship
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relationships
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, because their way of thinking and making
decision
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 is similar.
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, they live in harmony with each other and could be much stronger together. Despite all of these pluses , the main problem is that they can not advise and help each other, because their mindsets are similar.
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, they might get bored of long communicating with
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friends
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,
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 similarity of interests and no ability to develop
theirselves
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.
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,
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friend
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friends
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to
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person
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a person
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, who is
open minded
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 and has other ideas could benefit the person a lot
,
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 because they would learn other ways for solving problems,
making
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 decisions and positively change their point of view.
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 to
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, they would never get bored, because they would find
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 to discuss and argue.
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, all of my
friends
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 are real
friends
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 to me, because we have different mindsets, and easily get involved in communication. In conclusion, I strongly believe, people would gain from communicating and
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 being
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,
instead
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 of having
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no
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 real
friends
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 with whom,
human
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humans
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 could only not argue and shortly speak.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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