The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years.

The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years.
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The provided bar chart illustrates the average
rainfall
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in Australia by month
last
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year,
while
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the given line indicates the average
rainfall
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for Australia by month for the
last
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40 years.
Overall
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, it can be seen that over the shown period of 40 years, the amount of
rainfall
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was altering gradually, with some fluctuations
occuring
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occurring
in April and September. If to look at the bars,
it is clear that
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in January the
amount
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number
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of raindrops was the highest, over 60mm,
while
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at the end
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of the summer, and by the start of autumn, in August, September and October the proportion of rain was less than 20mm. Turning to the details, the portion which was high enough at the beginning of winter decreased rapidly in the month
April
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of April
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, going downwards to 20mm exactly.
Consequently
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, when it started to increase in March by 40mm, the index dropped to a smaller fraction.
However
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, by December the statistics were stable and the total
rainfall
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dose remained
40
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at 40
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mm.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, mm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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