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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates the layouts at present and after an expansion of a small-scale county named Islip. It is depicted that the
landuse
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land use
 of Islip will be enlarged in the future and more facilities are going to be installed. Attractively, the most dominant changes lay
on
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in
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 the transportation system and infrastructures planned in a block pattern.
According to
 the planned development map, some changes will be made
on
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present
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 layout. The west-east main
road
, going across the town, will be replaced by a dual-carriage new highroad in a circle which will surround the whole area. Meanwhile, a park at the southeast corner of the town is going to be shrunken in order to build a new housing area and
the
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 new
road
. There are some new facilities planned to build. Focusing on the current north side of the main
road
, an array of shops will be dismantled for
newly
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the newly
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 planned bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing. What's more, the middle part of cutting
main
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road
 will be turned into a pedestrian-only walking path.
Besides
, the school and housing area located at the very south of the town,
as well as
 the other array of shops on the south side of the current main
road
 will maintain their own situation in the future.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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