Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#government #investment #transport #systems #reductions #ticket #prices #pollution

Transport

pollution

is a big problem for many countries in the world today. In many

cities

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it takes a long time to get to places because of too many private vehicles on the roads.

addition

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all

this

traffic emits fumes that create air

pollution

. Some

people

say that governments spending money on public

transport

and reductions in public

transport

prices are the best way to resolve

this

problem. I agree with

this

and

also

suggest there are other steps we can

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take.

Firstly

, investment in public

transport

infrastructure helps solve the problem of traffic

pollution

. If there was a better, more reliable and developed public

transport

system

then

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people

will drive their

cars

. If

less

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people

drove

then

there would be much less

pollution

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example

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Tokyo

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there is a very good

transport

system

and not many

people

drive.

Furthermore

, if the government subsidized or reduced the price of public

transport

then

people

would use it.

For example

, many commuting

people

in England drive because there is not much

different

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to the cost of public

transport

so they choose private

cars

because they are more convenient.

Furthermore

in addition

to investment in public

transport

and lower

prices

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we need to

investing

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money in cleaner

cars

. Nowadays we have the technology

for

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create electric

cars

that don’t make

pollution

In conclusion, a good public

transports

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system

is the best way to solve traffic

pollution

. The

transport

system

also

needs to

being

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cheaper.

However

, we

also

need to make the

cars

that we use cleaner by using electricity and not oil.

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