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Some parents think computer games are better for children and they should be allowed to play more of them. whereas some parents argue that they are harmful to children both point of views and your opinion

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Nowadays, employees are required to share their personal
information
 when going for an interview. Some
people
 believe that
this
information
 can be beneficial for the employer,
while
 others do not believe
this
. I personally believe with a first set of
people
 and my inclination toward
this
 view will be discussed
further
 in the essay with examples. There are various factors that can be addressed why some
people
 believe that employers should benefit by accessing the personal
information
 of
job
 seekers when they for
for
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apply
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applying
Add the preposition
forapplying
show examples
 jobs. From the
hobbies
Add a comma
,hobbies
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 one can imagine employee behaviours and it can be deciding factor to assign them a personal duty.
For example
, a person who has more outings and movie habits can be a good fit for an oratory role. To add to
this
, if we go with marital status
then
 a movie maker would always prefer a single actor or actors for their movies as lead roles because by that only
people
 would take interest and ultimately their TRP would be elevated. I personally,
also
 believe in
this
 view. On the other side, a group of individuals counterargues it because of some reasons. Primarily, there is no guarantee to share accurate personal interests or
hobbies
while
 applying for work.
In other words
, to get the desired
job
 if candidates have a chance to apply their skills
then
 they might share relevant
information
 which is suitable for
this
job
.
For example
, if there is a
job
 vacancy for a culinary artist, applicants may write appropriate
hobbies
 like making and tasting different cuisine from various continents as their
hobbies
, which might be not true in their real life.
Thus
, even though they shared
information
 which is not useful at all when they come to on the ground. Still, I do not believe in
this
 view. In my opinion,
people
 would share the
right
information
while
 applying for jobs is beneficial to analyse their
job
 vacancies and track application to select the
right
 person for the vacant place. Nowadays, artificial intelligence-based software
also
 helps to track the
right
 candidate from personal
information
. In conclusion, to select the
right
 person for
job
 analytics tools need their personal
information
 and
hobbies
;
However
,
this
 is not true all the time because shared
information
 might be wrong.
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