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Successful sports professionals earn a great deal more than people in other important professions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#sports #professionals #people #professions
It is considered that
sportmen
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sportsmen
 get handsome money rather than folks who work in
another essential areas
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another essential area
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 like
medical
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the medical
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 and education
field
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fields
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. In
this
 essay, I will be implementing the grounds of both notions and
provide
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 my prospect. To commence with, there
a
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are a
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plethora of reasons
of
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apply
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why
sportmen
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sportsmen
earning
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 more.
Initially
, a myriad of people possess
this
 talent and they play for only
certain
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a certain
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 period of
time
. To elaborate
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it
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, the
sportmen
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sportsmen
 only can play for
their
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a
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 certain age of
time
 and after
that
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 they need to take a retirement because of their fitness level. For
instace
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instance
, the Turnine
sports
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Sports
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 News covered that the 70%
Indian
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of Indian
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 footballer prefer to take
their
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retirement in their late 40's.
Thus
, the
sportmen
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sportsmen
 get only a certain period of
time
 for their career and save money for their upcoming life.
On the other hand
, the other vital jobs
such
 as engineers and teachers earn less because their working periods are immense than
sportmen
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sportsmen
 and they don't need any
God gifted
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God-gifted
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 talent to pursue these jobs. To illustrate it, a score of teachers are doing their jobs in schools,
college
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colleges
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 and
univeristy
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university
;
however
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 only a few
sportmen
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sportsmen
 selected to play
for
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in
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 international games.
For example
, a
survery
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survey
 conducted by
School
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the School
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 Union Of Asia in which they analyzed that
the
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apply
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people
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people's
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 interest
of
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in
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atking
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taking
teacher
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teaching
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 profession is significantly raised in
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the youngster
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youngster
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youngsters
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. In conclusion, there is an undeniable fact that other necessary professions
is
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 crucial for society. Despite
this
sportmen
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sportsmen
 got more because they got special talent
by
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from
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 God and their career
time
 is less.
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