the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed

the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed
The pie charts compare the proportion of distributed police budgets, and the table illustrates the sources of money
thet
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they
that
get in an area of Britain between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, the
amount
of
budget
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the budget
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in 2018 is increasing significantly compared with 2017 with the biggest source
came
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from
national
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government. In regards
of
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to
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expenditure, salaries
projected
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as the main priority. the highest
ampunt
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amount
of budget in these two given periods
is
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came from
national
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the national
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government with
the
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a
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slightly increased
amount
in 2018 by 2.5
millions
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million
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making it 177.8
millions
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million
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. Following
with
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by
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local taxes which made about 91.2
millions
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million
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in 2017 and soared to 102.3
millions
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million
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. And the
last
and least source came from other types of sources
such
as grants at 38
millions
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million
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in 2017 and only rise slightly in 2018 to 38.5
millions
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million
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.
With the
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total
amount
of these sources is 304.7
millions
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million
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in 2017,
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and it
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it
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which
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rose to 318.6
millions
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million
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by 2018.
On the other hand
, the money was spent more
in
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on
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expenditure which is
three-quarter
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three-quarters
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in 2017 and decreased a little bit to 69% in 2018. Followed by
remain
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remaining
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categories which are expenditure on technology which soared slightly from 8% in 2017 to almost doubled in 2018 and
buldings
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buildings
which cost about 17% in 2017 and remain the same
amount
in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "soared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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