the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed
The pie charts compare the proportion of distributed police budgets, and the table illustrates the sources of money
thet
get in an area of Britain between 2017 and 2018. Correct your spelling
they
that
Overall
, the amount
of budget
in 2018 is increasing significantly compared with 2017 with the biggest source Correct article usage
the budget
came
from Wrong verb form
coming
national
government. In regards Add an article
the national
of
expenditure, salaries Change preposition
to
projected
as the main priority.
the highest Add a missing verb
are projected
ampunt
of budget in these two given periods Correct your spelling
amount
is
came from Unnecessary verb
apply
national
government with Add an article
the national
a national
the
slightly increased Correct article usage
a
amount
in 2018 by 2.5 millions
making it 177.8 Change to singular
million
millions
. Following Change to singular
million
with
local taxes which made about 91.2 Change preposition
by
millions
in 2017 and soared to 102.3 Change to singular
million
millions
. And the Change to singular
million
last
and least source came from other types of sources such
as grants at 38 millions
in 2017 and only rise slightly in 2018 to 38.5 Change to singular
million
millions
. Change to singular
million
With the
total Change preposition
The
amount
of these sources is 304.7 millions
in 2017, Change to singular
million
Correct word choice
and it
it
rose to 318.6 Correct pronoun usage
which
millions
by 2018.
Change to singular
million
On the other hand
, the money was spent more in
expenditure which is Change preposition
on
three-quarter
in 2017 and decreased a little bit to 69% in 2018. Followed by Fix the agreement mistake
three-quarters
remain
categories which are expenditure on technology which soared slightly from 8% in 2017 to almost doubled in 2018 and Change the verb form
remaining
buldings
which cost about 17% in 2017 and remain the same Correct your spelling
buildings
amount
in 2018.Submitted by baitynuris191 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soared" was used 2 times.
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