The diagram shows how sports shoes are made.

The diagram shows how sports shoes are made.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows how sports shoes are made.
The illustration represents the process of manufacturing sports
shoes
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.
Overall
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, the whole process takes 18 months to complete. The material
that is
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used comes from the other factory. All of the
shoes
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are dispatched to the shop and the other country. To start with, the
staff
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started to design the shape and style of the sports
shoes
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.
Then
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, they sent the design of the
shoes
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to the factory where all of the materials are sent to. The leather is prepared by the tannery, and the fabric is prepared by the mill. The rubber sole is
also
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transferred to the factory. After that, all of the material is connected together by hand.
Then
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, the
staff
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sewed all of the pieces together. The
shoes
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that are now in shape are stuck with bottoms by glue to make the insole.
Next,
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the
staff
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put the rope into the
shoes
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. When the whole process of making is done, the
staff
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transfer all the
shoes
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to the box prepared for dispatch. Each box is able to contain 12 pairs of
shoes
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.
Then
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, all the products are transported to the warehouse before being dispatched to the shop.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shoes, staff with synonyms.
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