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Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
food
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 production industry has significantly gained popularity these days
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 the increasing demand for exotic
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 items. It is opinionated that citizens should only consume the
food
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 which is produced and available in their locality as it would be better for a healthy environment and a good economy. I disagree with
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 idea as I believe that people should utilize
food
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 from all over the
world
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. I will state my reasons in the paragraph below.
Food
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 from different
parts
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 of the
world
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 contains various health benefits. There is a variety of consummatory products that are produced in certain
parts
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 of the
world
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. One cannot produce a variety of
food
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 items in their local area as many factors are considered like the place, season, public demand and so on.
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, whenever I visit a doctor for my health checkup, she suggests I eat fruits
such
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 as apple which has plenty of nutrients and provides health benefits.
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, apples are not available in my location because the production is mainly held in the northern part of the
country
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. Moving on,
food
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 from vivid
parts
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 of the
world
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 holds culture and helps you to stay connected with other communities as well. It shows the exchange of traditions between two nations. It benefits the
country
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's economy as well, by shipping
food
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 items which are exotically produced only in my
country
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.
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, the production of Alphonso mangoes is only seen in my
country
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.
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, it can be retrieved that people can consume
food
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 which is travelled thousands of miles from different
parts
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 of the
world
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmentally friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • long-distance transportation
  • biodiversity
  • pesticides
  • fertilizers
  • local economy
  • sustainability
  • feasible
  • diverse range
  • food choices
  • cultural identity
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