Smart phones and other similar electronic gadgets have reduced the contact between friends. Discuss how far you agree with this statement.

Some people believe that electronic
gadets
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gadgets
such
as smartphones have made contact between friends
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separate
.
However
, I do not
agree
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this
opinion because I am of
opinion
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that communication tools have made our relationships close.
To begin
with, we have
being
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able to keep in touch
eeasier
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easier
with each other. Whenever we want to text with friends, we can send messages, even if we are apart from each other.
For example
, when
a
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intimate friend
move
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to
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a distance
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distance
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place, we would be reluctant to get in touch with each other without communication tools.
Therefore
we feel free to email or call
with
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by
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phones
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phone
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because we don't have to write
letter
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letters
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.
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,
the
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online provides us
to
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with to
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opportunity to text friends. We could react to photographs or videos, which some people post
them
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apply
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on social media.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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