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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#experiences #lives #time #lessons #future
In the
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beginning
, I would like to say, that I agree with
this
 statement excluding some
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points
. First of all, as
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 man said: "
time
 cures". We do
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feel
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 badly and tend to have a lot of
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stress
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 when something is going wrong or we have to adjust some
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effort
 to achieve results. But after some
time
 the person usually forgives the troubles he passed through and everything seems normal to him. I can say, it`s in human`s nature not to remember all
stressfull
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stressful
situation
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situations
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,
otherwise
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 you can lose your mind. Your brain produces adrenaline in
stresfull
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stressful
siutaution
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situation
situations
station
, so you can act quickly and reduce any pain. But it`s calming you down by throwing endofrines to your body
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 when everything is ok. I can remember one situation, which happened to me
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 when I was
studing
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studying
 a new subject and we had a
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 group to work on a project. We had constant debates about everything, everybody had their own opinion
how
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 to do the project,
we
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 were working 24/7
beacuse
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because
 we did a lot of mistakes and had no experience. It was
extremly
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extremely
 hard both
phisically
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physically
 and
mentaly
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mentally
 to do the project in
time
 and get it done well. Now more than 2 years passed and I almost forgot how hard it was. I do remember some negative things, but now everything looks not so important and
difficult
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 to make.
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 we can`t tell, that every critical situation that happened to us, can become valuable
lessons
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lesson
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 for the future. Hard illness,
loss
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 of
the
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 relative or friend can
seriosly
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seriously
 affect
you
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 life, not bringing any joy or relief afterwards.
Overall
, I think that, almost every
diffucult
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difficult
 step, that you`ve made in your life, after some
time
 turns into experience and wisdom.
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