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The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped

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The maps illustrate the significant transformation of the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 compared to 2012.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the museum witnessed radical changes with the construction of more facilities and functional rooms. Concerning, the path and the special exhibition
room
 remained
unchaged
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unchanged
while
 the entrance was turned into
entrance
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an entrance
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 and the terrace was built next to the entrance hall. After that, the shop was steady,
however
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 the reception
was
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added more function as cloaks
room
, and to the north of
this
, there was a construction of a restaurant. Regarding
stairs
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the stairs
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, they were removed to be replaced by a lift. There was a replacement of
cloaks
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the cloaks
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room
was
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at the right of the lift for a
chidren
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children
 area. The reading
room
 was still there,
whereas
 there were the constructions of
self-service
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a self-service
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room
 and exhibition
room
 on the second floor of the Walton
museum
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Museum
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 after its redevelopment in 2018.
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