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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #education #recreation #sport
It is argued that the authorities should spend more
money
 on
education
instead
on
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of
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recreation
 and
athlets
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athletes
athletics
. I fully agree that
the
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apply
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governments should focus on improving educational sectors
instead
 others. About
government
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the government
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 should spend more
money
 on
education
 than on
recreation
 and sport mostly on
education
 and some in sports and
recreation
 for me
education
 is more important than most of the things in the world most people care about
education
 but I prefer both new Ouse both of the things are improving in our life mostly my handwriting is better than
hama
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 lmao but mostly I think in
education
 he’s Ouse most of the schools are old they need newer stuff like hiring more teachers and a reliable principal lol and about sports and recreations like Dubai has spent a lot of
money
 on
recreation
 and investing
money
 into
recreation
 for building like Saudi Arabia they hired Ronaldo for football and making
money
 out of him but I prefer sports like the
nfl
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NFL
 football etc .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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