Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the authorities should spend more
money
on
education
instead
on
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recreation
and
athlets
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athletes
athletics
. I fully agree that
the
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governments should focus on improving educational sectors
instead
others. About
government
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the government
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should spend more
money
on
education
than on
recreation
and sport mostly on
education
and some in sports and
recreation
for me
education
is more important than most of the things in the world most people care about
education
but I prefer both new Ouse both of the things are improving in our life mostly my handwriting is better than
hama
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lmao but mostly I think in
education
he’s Ouse most of the schools are old they need newer stuff like hiring more teachers and a reliable principal lol and about sports and recreations like Dubai has spent a lot of
money
on
recreation
and investing
money
into
recreation
for building like Saudi Arabia they hired Ronaldo for football and making
money
out of him but I prefer sports like the
nfl
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NFL
football etc .
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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