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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #education #recreation #sport
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It is argued that the authorities should spend more
money
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 on
education
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instead
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on
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of
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recreation
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 and
athlets
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athletes
athletics
. I fully agree that
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governments should focus on improving educational sectors
instead
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 others. About
government
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the government
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 should spend more
money
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 on
education
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 than on
recreation
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 and sport mostly on
education
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 and some in sports and
recreation
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 for me
education
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 is more important than most of the things in the world most people care about
education
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 but I prefer both new Ouse both of the things are improving in our life mostly my handwriting is better than
hama
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 lmao but mostly I think in
education
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 he’s Ouse most of the schools are old they need newer stuff like hiring more teachers and a reliable principal lol and about sports and recreations like Dubai has spent a lot of
money
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 on
recreation
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 and investing
money
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 into
recreation
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 for building like Saudi Arabia they hired Ronaldo for football and making
money
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 out of him but I prefer sports like the
nfl
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NFL
 football etc .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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