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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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there are some notions among
folk
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the folk
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 that the chief environmental issue of our era is the extinction of some specific
plants
 or animals. There are some opposite views
which
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 they assume the other environmental troubles are more serious. In
this
 essay, I intend to discuss both sides of these views and say my
view
. On the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the
view
 that, nowadays the main duty of mankind prevent some particular
plants
 and animals from extinction. From
this
 point of
view
 they say, we are able to use some species the produce some medicine.
For example
, the initial
materials
 of most vitamins bring from some
plants
 and if we do not have these vegetarians, we will be unable to provide these drugs.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument valid because
due to
 developing science, we will provide some better
materials
instead
 of previous
materials
.
On the other hand
, many commentators justifiably argue that there are several environmental crises that have a decisive factor
for
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 human health. From
expert's
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 perspective, In the near future all over the world, we have a
water
 crisis
due to
 the decline
sources
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 of clean
water
.
As a result
, humans have to find a new source of
water
 from nature. If we pay attention to
protect
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 the environment from some diseases we are able to drop the negative effects of future crises.
Additionally
, the majority of basic
materials
 human needs are provided by meat and vegetable. So if we do not have safe sources, we will not have healthy feeds. In conclusion,
Although
 there are some merits from save some species of
plants
 and animals from cratering some drugs, the positive points of
this
view
 are far more. Environmental protection is highly likely to have a good effect on the safety of
water
 and basic
materials
 of , mankind's feeds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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