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The most important aim of science ought to be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since a lot of improvement has been done in our
life
 science without taking into consideration that includes numerous fields.
However
, in my ,essay I am going to analyse two of the main science -technology and health- that have as their main aim improving
people
’s
life
according to
 my opinion as well. More specifically, technology has been spreading more and more recently and it has been mainly used to simplify everyone’s
life
.
For instance
, since ‘the 90ies, home appliances have developed, and
life
 for housewives started to become easier. ,
Likewise
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 when computers were invented,
life
 started to become easier and
people
 too who preferred to write on computers since there every written thing will be readable to everybody.
In addition
 to those, the internet was a success in
people
’s
life
 because it is a sort of encyclopedia available to most
people
 worldwide.
On the other hand
, health intended as science had remote origins.The need to be healthy and to live more time possible exists since humans exist. During those centuries, the perspective of curing someone has changed continuously. In the beginning, humans looked for solutions in nature,
then
 chemistry had a major role in producing medicines intended as solutions to lethal diseases and nowadays technology and health share the aim to find solutions to some uncurable illnesses in some aspects. To summarize, both those fields have as their main goal to get
people
's
life
 better:
while
 technology has focused more on the daily
life
 of all
people
, medicine has as its main objective treating the most unlucky
people
 who suffer from the disease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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