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The proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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A breakdown of the percentages of earnings that grown-ups and youngsters in the United Kingdom wasted on 4 ordinary items in 1998 is enumerated in the presented table.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 each age group and gender has various proportions when juxtaposed with one another. As can be seen in the diagram, children spent the majority of their income on music at a whopping 39%,
whereas
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this
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 category appears to be less popular among adults at 5 per cent. The same could be said for the electronic equipment too.
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, the highest number is occupying 25% in the food section. A glance at the minors' chart gives information that the former item was the smallest share out of all four with 10%. Turning to the details, it could be noticed that the amount for music is approximately identical between boys (38%) and girls (40%).
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, the figure for gizmos in the older generation is very dissimilar.
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, males used up 10% of their salary on gadgets,
while
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 females utilized a measly 1%
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