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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences.

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I think
computer
 i boon to humans. As it is widely used across the world. The
computer
 is used by industries.
Furthermore
,
computer
 store a lot of
information
 which would be handy in future. Many processes
such
 as Ms excel, Ms word, and Ms PowerPoint, is being used by youngsters and student for their project. ,
Furthermore
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 many processes
such
 as hiring
is
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 done through it. Since it is widely useduse people use it for calling around the world through an application called Skype.
Moreover
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 it is used in school to teach students what the usage of computers. ,
Similarly
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 a projector can is
also
 used to connect. As we can store
information
 in a pen drive any data can be transferred easily.  On the other ,hand it
also
 has a negative impact on the student because they use it in playing games which can be addictive and harmful to their eyes.
Whereas
 they spend time
on
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watching movies and playing YouTube. Some spam could lead to wrong
information
.
Following
this
 computers can be hacked easily if not protected which can lead to
be
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sharing
information
 with unknown people which can be dangerous in future. Plus there has to be an anti-virus in the
computer
 to protect from viruses. In ,conclusion computers can bring a positive and a negative impact too.
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