The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares the quantities of closures and openings of one country's
shops
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from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, a downward trend was seen in the number of
shops
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that closed and opened eventually. It is clearly seen that in most of the years, more
shops
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were shut down than the newly built ones. In 2011, there were over 8500 new
shops
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coming online
while
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the figure of closed
shops
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was significantly lower. But in the next 3 years, more businesses went disrupted. The worsening situation saw a reverse in 2015 when closures dropped by 95% from the previous year to bottom out at about 500 cases,
while
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a remarkably higher quantity of
shops
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were
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established. Throughout the
last
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three years, shop openings remained stable till 2018 when it decreased by one-third to 3000.
On the other hand
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, an upward leap in the figure of closures was seen in 2016, increasing by 10 times from 2015;
however
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, the number stayed quite stable reaching slightly above 5000 in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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