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Some people say it is the government responsibility to transport children to school. Others believe parents should transport their children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Morning routines are very hectic for every person,
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 they do not even get
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 hour for breakfast. At
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 stage, a certain community believes that Government should provide
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 to carry their children to
school
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. some modernists prefer to drop their offspring at learning institutions. I believe it is essential for the ruling authorities to provide
services
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 for children to travel to
school
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 because
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 will help to minimise traffic
jams
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 and parents will
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 get
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 to maintain their routine. To commence with, traffic
jams
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 and pollution is the major problem of
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 decade. It is the government's responsibility to start special bus
services
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 to carry offspring to schools.
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, there are millions of students who are driving daily to learning institutions, and if each parent will travel from their own vehicle
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 pollution and traffic
jams
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 will significantly increase. In a country like India and
China
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 average population is around 2.5 billion, and the governments have started some
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 for infants to transport them to
school
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.
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, it is an undeniable fact that in
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 era corporate workload pressure is very high. Parents hardly get time to spend with their upbringings. If they will travel with their children in the morning to
school
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, they will get some time to talk to them, about what is happening in their life, how their studies are going on and even play some games. As a matter of fact,
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 small initiative will help to build a strong friendship with them. In a nutshell, every aspect has its pros and cons.
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 parent's relationship will become more strong if they will daily drop their infants at
school
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 because they will get some time to know about each other, I believe it is even more important that the government should provide these
services
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 to reduce the hectic
jams
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 on the road
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 will
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 help in reducing global warming.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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