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Spokane communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#spokane #communication
ㅤIt is commonly believed by some that a plethora of
people
 would rather spoken type of conveying which is the most potent way to communicate
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 to writing. In
this
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this
 statement which is supported
spoken
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 communication and
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outline
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 my reasons.
To begin
 with, many factors can be taken into account to explain the drawbacks of spoken language. First and foremost, it cannot be denied that
people
 who are not able to hear or have some problems with communication prefer written ones owing to their disable to speak fluently.
Secondly
, provided that
people
 write more
compasation
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compensation
, they give the power to
people
 to remember that statistic for a long time.
For example
, in
India
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 a plethora of
people
 who are disabled have a chance to convey with their relatives by using written communication.
On the other hand
, as for
people
 who strongly consider that spoken language is much superior for sharing information or talking with each other. Those
of
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people
 who esteem like that always speak to each other due to several reasons. One of the main is that type of population who adore telling something
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 typing can explain their ideas without challenges.
For instance
, talking about various issues and passing feelings to other
people
 can be provided
straightforward
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 way to connect with each other by using their tongues
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 In
conclusin
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conclusion
, to my mind,
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 type of association is pivotal rather than writing as it plays a
crusial
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crucial
 role in our life. #dusmurodov_shohjahon_30
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