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Although more and more people use public transport, many city streets are still overcrowded with traffic. -What measures can be taken to resolve this issue? Provide specific reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience to support your opinion.

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Introduction
Overcrowded traffic is still
being
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a big issue in many city streets, in spite of the increasing amount of public transport users. The fact of spending so long time to get a place and feeling uncomfortable in full buses or subways demands thinking
in
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of
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 new ideas to solve
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problem
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.
Body paragraph 1
One of the most successful measurements for reducing traffic troubles is living near our workplaces and
study-places
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study places
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. In some cities of
Spain
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 the major regulate and organize a
system
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 to make it. It’s likely to get technical and administrative support from those
cities
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city's
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government
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governments
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 to apply that
system
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 in other places.
Body paragraph 2
Promote
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 and getting more
remote-jobs
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remote jobs
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are
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also
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another method
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other methods
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 to reduce the number of citizens that demand the need of being transported. In order to get it, it’s important that enterprises have better technologies and special engineering
asistance
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assistance
.
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 the companies like Facetwo and Goutow who work successfully online full time could support others.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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, those who transport alone by their own vehicles could pick some passengers up. In
this
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 way, a car will transport 4
persons
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people
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,
instead
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 of just one. Of
course
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this
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system
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 should be regulated by local councils or major government.
Conclusion
Summing up, the crowded traffic can be improved with mainly the 3 new measurements explained above.
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 them demands efforts of the government, the citizens and companies in order to change the
system
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