The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the information of a police station in Britain
that
the budget and expenses in the Correct word choice
apply
year
2017 and 2018 respectively.
On the one hand, the total budget of 2018 just had a slight increase to 2017, which is only 13.9 million more precisely. Fix the agreement mistake
years
In addition
, the table shows that the National Government attributed the highest amount among the source of budget, while
the other sources, e.g. grants, dominated the smallest figure of income. Moreover
, the local taxes raised more than 10 million, which is the highest raise compared to other sources of the fund.
On the other hand
, through the pie chart
we can know, how Add a comma
,chart
these money
Change the determiner
this money
were
spent, which can mainly be divided into 3 parts, that are salaries, technology, and buildings and transport. The salaries of the police Correct subject-verb agreement
was
staffs
have the maximum share of total expenditure, which is 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. Fix the agreement mistake
staff
While
the technology has approximately doubled in 2018 than 2017, however
, the building and transportation remians
the same.
In conclusion, even though there is a mild difference between the two years, we can still see some fluctuations between them, and we can assume that, with Correct your spelling
remain
Correct article usage
the facilitated
facilitated
of technology, which leads Replace the word
facilitation
the
less cost Change preposition
to the
in
salaries.Change preposition
of
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