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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The two pie charts compare the percentage of five categories (housing, transport, food, health care, and other goods and services in
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 2010. It is noticeable that the proportion of other goods and transport application apply experienced a significant fall in
Malaysia
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while
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 the figure for housing and food saw a small rose.Units are measured in percentages In 2010,
Japan
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's 29% applied average household expenditures went on other goods which is the largest pie in the chart,
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, in,
Malaysia
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 the figure for
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 category had fallen by 26%.During
this
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 period the demand for transport in
Malaysia
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 and the Japanese population experienced a considerable fall from
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20% to 10%.
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, in terms of, housing the percentage of expenditure category made up 21% in
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 and
Malaysia
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this
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 figure saw a big increase at 34% is the largest household expenditure of all. In
Japan
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 ,the smallest percentage of expenditure belonged to food, but in,
Malaysia
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 there was a 3% rise in that category.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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