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The idea of going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home beause of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in different culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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In contemporary times, studying at foreign universities can have a positive effect on many people.
However
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 there is an opinion that it is better for
students
 to stay in their home
country
 and attend universities there, as living in a different
country
 with a different culture can be challenging. I
partionally
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partially
personally
 disagree
this
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 opinion, as I believe that
students
 should consider studying abroad.
To begin
 with, there is a significant issue of cost associated with study abroad.
For example
, tuition fees are generally higher for foreign
students
 compared to native
students
. Most universities prioritize native
students
 and charge higher fees for international
students
.
Additionally
, language barriers can
also
 be a deterrent for
students
 considering studying abroad. Apart from the academic challenges that come with university education, the language difference can make it even more difficult for
students
 to adapt and understand the coursework. Having said that, there are numerous advantages to studying abroad for
students
. First and foremost, being exposed to a different
country
's culture broadens their horizons. If
students
 study only in their own
country
, they may develop a narrow mindset. In
this
 era of globalization, people are inspired by and share their own culture with each other.
Therefore
, studying abroad can be a positive and enriching experience for
students
. In conclusion, it is true that studying abroad can be challenging for
students
, and staying in their own
country
 may provide a more secure path for their future.
However
, I believe that the
benifits
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benefits
 of studying abroad and expanding their perspectives
outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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