The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.

The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.
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The
chart
gives information about the average annual
water
consumption
in
kilolitre
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kilolitres
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per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for
last
year, with the pie
chart
that shows the distribution of Australian
water
consumption
by the year 2014. As is shown from the bar
chart
that
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the residents in Perth consumed much more
water
in comparison with other cities in Australia.The Perth inhabitants demonstrate the highest level in
consumption
of
water
,
while
people in Canberra show the lowest point in
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of
water
.The other three cities
such
as Sydney, Adelaide and Brisbane except
from
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Melbourne illustrate the same results. It can be seen from the pie
chart
that
water
consumption
distribution in agriculture indicates the largest proportion among others, with approximately 67 per cent. The figures for Australian
water
consumption
distribution in households,
water
supply, sewage and drainage, electricity and gas supply, manufacturing, mining and other industries accounted for around between 9 and 2 per cent.
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