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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Due to
 problems associated with the usage of fossil fuels, the government ought to encourage the use of alternative expert energy. I agree that those other forms of power
such
 as solar and wind will be a remedy to the issue of global warming. First of all, with the utilization of another origin of intensity, there will be a reduction in environmental pollution. Burning of fossil fuels by car engines and other locomotive engines contributes to more than 70% of air deterioration in a place. Recent Studies have shown that the use of cell-powered vehicles is a way to curtail the problem of pollution.
Therefore
, the option of choosing a cleaner source of energy will ensure a safer environment.
Secondly
, the introduction of windmills in the city will be beneficial to the masses. The government should
also
 make windmills available in urban areas as an alternative source of electricity. In Australia today, spaces are being reserved for the installation of windmills in cities.
This
 will enable them to have another source of electricity and
also
 there will be less corruption.
Finally
, the prices of goods made to replace fossil fuel products should be affordable to people. The government should ensure that solar cars and other products replacing fuel-powered products can be purchased by individuals.
For instance
, In ,Nigeria only the rich are opportune to install solar panels as a form of electricity.
Hence
, making it cheaper for the masses will encourage people to use other sources of power. In conclusion, with the political will, various sources of energy will be used to reduce the environmental challenge facing the world today.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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