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The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped.

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The maps reveal the change
of
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 the South Wing of Walton Museum in the period
of
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 2008 to 2012. In 2008, the South Wing was a two-storey building with a path on the west. On the ground
floor
, there was a special exhibition
room
, a shop and a
cloaks
room
. The reception was on the first
floor
, and there was
also
 a reading
room
 next to the reception. Visitors can take the stairs between the shop and the
cloaks
room
 to the ground
floor
. By the year 2012, the building had four floors with
a
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life from the ground
floor
 to the top
floor
.
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Children
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The children
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 play area had replaced the
cloaks
room
 and the
cloaks
room
 had been moved to the reception. On the eastern side of the lift, there was a new cafe where visitors can serve themselves and on the top
floor
 was another exhibition
room
. Opposite
to
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the cafe was a new-built restaurant. In the west of the building, an entrance hall was constructed on the first
floor
 and it should be noted that on the second
floor
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 there was a terrace.
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