The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the categories of people with whom
Americans
spend most of their
time
during their lifetime. At the age of 20
Americans
spent most of their
time
with family, approximately 4,5
hours
per day
while
the quality
time
with a partner and children is less than an hour. After age 30 pattern changes,
time
with family decreased to just a little bit more than 1 hour,
while
the amount of
time
Americans
spend with partners rose significantly to 3
hours
and
time
with children increased to 4
hours
per day.
Americans
who are more than 50 years old experienced a fall in the
amount
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number
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of
hours
spent with coworkers, children and family,
meanwhile
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there was a gradual increase in
time
with a partner. After 70 there was a significant fall in
hours
with a significant other from 4
hours
time
decreased to 2,5
hours
per day.
In addition
, by the end of the graph
hours
spent alone peaked at 8
hours
.
Overall
, it is pretty clear that the
hours
spent alone
was
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were
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growing constantly and it was the most stable pattern. The
time
that
Americans
spend with other categories had fluctuations
due to
the life circumstances
such
as growing up, getting into a college or retiring.
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