The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the categories of people with whom
Americans
spend most of their time
during their lifetime.
At the age of 20 Americans
spent most of their time
with family, approximately 4,5 hours
per day while
the quality time
with a partner and children is less than an hour. After age 30 pattern changes, time
with family decreased to just a little bit more than 1 hour, while
the amount of time
Americans
spend with partners rose significantly to 3 hours
and time
with children increased to 4 hours
per day. Americans
who are more than 50 years old experienced a fall in the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
hours
spent with coworkers, children and family, meanwhile
there was a gradual increase in Add a comma
,meanwhile
time
with a partner. After 70 there was a significant fall in hours
with a significant other from 4 hours
time
decreased to 2,5 hours
per day. In addition
, by the end of the graph hours
spent alone peaked at 8 hours
.
Overall
, it is pretty clear that the hours
spent alone was
growing constantly and it was the most stable pattern. The Correct subject-verb agreement
were
time
that Americans
spend with other categories had fluctuations due to
the life circumstances such
as growing up, getting into a college or retiring.Submitted by sevrukov.stepan on
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