The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five major categories(

food

, housing, transportation, health care and clothing) in the United States,

Canada

, the United Kingdom and

Japan

in the year 2009. Units are measured in percentage.

Overall

, it can be seen that the countries spent most of their money on housing,

food

and transportation. The US and

had the highest shares of expenditures in housing. In terms of

food

, the United States spent about 13% shares on

this

as opposed to exactly 15% in

canada

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Canada

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whereas

the

had about 21% and

Japan

which

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apply

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appeared to

spent

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spend

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the most money on

food

which was just about 23%.

Next,

the USA had the highest percentage in housing (26%) followed by the

(24%).

Then

the

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apply

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Japan

was at ( 22%) compared with

canada

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Canada

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which stood at ( 21%).

Following

this

, the number of

transportation

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transports

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were

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was

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more variable as

canada

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Canada

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was at (20%), just above the USA at (19%) and

Japan

and

were lower at (15% and 10%) respectively. Expenditures on health care

ranges

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range

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from a low of (3%) in the

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, canada, japan, uk with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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4 paragraphs

186 words

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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009.

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

If a product is good or it meets people's needs, people will buy it so advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. DO the advanatges of this outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home rather than going into an office each day.Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?