The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five major categories(

food

, housing, transportation, health care and clothing) in the United States,

Canada

, the United Kingdom and

Japan

in the year 2009. Units are measured in percentage.

Overall

, it can be seen that the countries spent most of their money on housing,

food

and transportation. The US and

had the highest shares of expenditures in housing. In terms of

food

, the United States spent about 13% shares on

this

as opposed to exactly 15% in

canada

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Canada

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whereas

the

had about 21% and

Japan

which

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apply

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appeared to

spent

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spend

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the most money on

food

which was just about 23%.

Next,

the USA had the highest percentage in housing (26%) followed by the

(24%).

Then

the

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apply

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Japan

was at ( 22%) compared with

canada

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Canada

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which stood at ( 21%).

Following

this

, the number of

transportation

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transports

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were

Correct subject-verb agreement

was

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more variable as

canada

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Canada

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was at (20%), just above the USA at (19%) and

Japan

and

were lower at (15% and 10%) respectively. Expenditures on health care

ranges

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range

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from a low of (3%) in the

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, canada, japan, uk with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

186 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast foods. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You have bought a new laptop computer and in a few days of purchase discovered a major flaw. Write a letter to the company. In your letter – introduce yourself – explain the situation – say what action you would like to company to take.

You recently bought a toy from a company online. When the toy was delivered, you found some problems with it. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter: -Describe the toy -Explain the problems with it -Tell the manager what you would like her/him to do

Analysts tell us that many people today feel stressed and think they have insufficient control over their lives. What problems do such feelings cause? What remedies could you suggest?

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