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It is more important for school children to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #children #history #world
Many people opine that having a better
graps
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grasp
 of
knowledge
 about local
history
 is more imperative than that about
world
history
.
While
 I accept that it is necessary to study about
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 of their own nation, I believe that it is wise to gain insights
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 the
history
 of the
world
. On the one hand, learning about local
history
 helps school children value their present peaceful life and
and
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appreciate their ancestors’
effort
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efforts
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 more. To gain
the
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independence as nowadays, each country had to surpass thousands of years
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 war fighting for its peace. The young generation
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 to know the events that lead to what they can have today.
Therefore
, they can feel grateful for the blood, tears and sweat of many generations to establish their country. Students will be fostered in themselves the appreciation for their
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 backgrounds and the love for their deep heritage and nation.
As a result
, they will be motivated to become better and carry on the responsibilities of protecting the boundaries of their regions.
On the other hand
, expanding students’
knowledge
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history
 worldwide is
also
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importance
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.
Firstly
, studying
this
 provides children with a comprehensive
knowledge
 of the
world
 establishment. The sheer insights about their local
history
 might give them biased
knowledge
. Looking at the picture as a whole will help young pupils to have their own judgement and justify
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 is right and wrong.
Moreover
, understanding
about
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the
world
 will facilitate
young
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 generation to become global
citizen
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citizens
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.
A vast
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knowledge
about
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the
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world
 events enriches their
understandings
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 of different countries’ cultural and historical heritage.
This
 equips children with life experience to live in any country. In conclusion, it is certainly true that local
history
 is of
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 to study but knowing about
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world
history
 is
not
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 less important.
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