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Sompe poeple believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disgaree. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often said by many individuals that bikes are the most convenient vehicle of transportation in urban areas
whereas
 others believe that there are other means of transportation that are the best means of driving. Using bicycles in the metropolis is sustainable for the environment but travelling by two-wheeler is very time-consuming and tiring. The pros and cons of riding a bike in big cities will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, why do people consider that cycles are the best mode to
travel
 from one place to another in urban areas because they keep the environment
pollution free
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 and help to maintain sustainability
.
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Moreover
, two-wheelers are cheaper than cars and more affordable for everyone in society.
In addition
, travelling by bicycle is more convenient in crowded cities because they do not require much place on the road
while
 riding.
Therefore
, it is advisable to
travel
 by cycle rather than big cars in cities.
On the other hand
, in
this
 fast-paced era, it is impossible to keep up with society
while
 riding bicycles because they are more time-consuming and
takes
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 a long time to
travel
 from one place to another. Not only the cars or buses are fast and quick but they are
also
 more comfortable and convenient to
travel
.
For instance
, a distance of 20km can be traveled in 20 minutes by car but it can take up to 2 hours by bicycle.
Hence
, bicycles are not considered advantageous in urban areas.
To conclude
, I believe that no doubt, bikes are an easy and affordable mode of transportation but the limitations are far
way
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more than the advantages because of inconvenience and
less
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low
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 reliability.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion lack sufficient development and clarity. Ensure the introduction presents a clear thesis and the conclusion summarizes the main points and restates the opinion.
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Your opinion

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