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Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

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The chart illustrates the
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 of three different teams getting over the four-year period from 2002 to 2005.
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, the trend fluctuated for all the teams,
however
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,
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 B constantly gained
the
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higher results
comparing
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 to those of
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team
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 A and
C
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. It can be seen that 2002 was the prime time for
team
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 A when it got the highest score of the whole chart, at 82.
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, the performance of
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 A witnessed some fluctuations during the time observed.
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 of the period,
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 A scored 55
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, which was still higher than those of its counterparts.
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, in 2002,
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team
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C
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 had quite humble figures with just 5 and 10
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 respectively.
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, between 2002 and 2004, there was a significant increase in the performance of
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team
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 A from 5 to 35 scores
while
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team
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C
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 remained stable
around
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 5 to 15
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. In 2005, the scores for
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 A and
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 were recorded at 8 and 5
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 sequentially.
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