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Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

#people #copy #tv #magazines #development
The chart illustrates the
points
 of three different teams getting over the four-year period from 2002 to 2005.
Overall
, the trend fluctuated for all the teams,
however
,
team
 B constantly gained
the
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higher results
comparing
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 to those of
team
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teams
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 A and
C
. It can be seen that 2002 was the prime time for
team
 A when it got the highest score of the whole chart, at 82.
Nonetheless
, the performance of
team
 A witnessed some fluctuations during the time observed.
At the end
 of the period,
team
 A scored 55
points
, which was still higher than those of its counterparts.
In contrast
, in 2002,
team
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 A and
C
 had quite humble figures with just 5 and 10
points
 respectively.
Nevertheless
, between 2002 and 2004, there was a significant increase in the performance of
team
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 A from 5 to 35 scores
while
team
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C
 remained stable
around
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 5 to 15
points
. In 2005, the scores for
team
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 A and
C
 were recorded at 8 and 5
points
 sequentially.
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