Now a lot of people in the college are doing academic study, we should encourage them to learn a vocational skill like plumber, electrician. Do you agree or disagree?

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Academics
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are given much more importance these days,
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of learning other
skills
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like plumbing, beautician etcetera. I think we should encourage students to learn these
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instead
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of only focusing on Science
, Mathematics
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and mathematics
. These extra
skills
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can be helpful in their future to get good
jobs
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and sometimes can be helpful in opening their own businesses. There is a reason why people ask their children to choose
academics
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to study
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than vocational
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.
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,
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this kind
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these kinds
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of
jobs
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are highly paid
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and every parent thinks that their children should earn and get more success in their life.
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, doctors these days are earning so much and living their life in a lavish lifestyle.
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, the job scenarios should be changed that should not be based on
academics
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but should be based on a
person
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's experience. It may be possible that a
person
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is not good in
academics
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but he has great practical
skills
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in certain areas like plumbing, and electrics. So it is important that job criteria should be changed, so people's mentality.
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, the extra
skills
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are very
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important
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for a
person
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in his/her future. A
person
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can pursue their career with those
skills
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and can open his own business and there is no comparison between having his own business with doing a job for someone.
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, we have seen a
person
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who does
jobs
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are not financially stable as compared to the one who is running his own company. So, it is important that
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can learn
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skills
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whenever get the time and
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need to prioritize over
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studies.
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will make a
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extraordinary from all others. To put it in a nutshell, I
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saying, it is good to learn
academics
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, but we should encourage children to participate in extracurricular activities so that they can make them their hobbies and make their career in it.
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