The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995-2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the total number of
telephone
calls in the minute in three different categories namely, local, national and international, and mobiles in
period
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a period
the period
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of 8
years
from 1995 to 2002 in the UK.
Overall
, the local
telephone
calls had the highest amount
in
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of
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all time.
However
, the
trend
of it
,
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was not upward in all
years
.
Although
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the mobiles
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mobiles
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mobile
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trend
was upward, it had the least ratio.
Also
, the
trend
of national and international calls
as
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is
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same
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the same
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as the mobiles. In 1995 local
telephone
calls
was
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were
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about 70
billion
minutes
which was doubled from national and international calls. After 4
years
,
telephone
calls reached
at
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its pick 90
billion
minutes
.
However
,
at
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in
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those
years
national calls rose slightly and reached 50
billion
minutes
. After 1999,
upward
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the upward
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trend
continued and in 2002 reached
at
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it pick about 60
billion
minutes
. But, local calls started to decrease and in three
years
about 20
billion
calls fell. Mobile
phone
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phones
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in 1995, had the least ratio under 5
billion
minutes
. The
trend
of that was upward.
Although
from 1995 to 1998 rose slightly, from 1999 to 2002 increased sharply and each year almost 5 to 10
billion
minutes
added
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were added
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, and in 2002 the total number of mobile calls reached more
than40
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than 40
billion
minutes
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words telephone, years, trend, billion, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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