The chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the average
hours
spent working per
day
by married couples in paid employment between the age of twenty-four to forty-four and forty-five to sixty-four. There
are
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almost no difference between the
time
spent by husbands
nor
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and
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wives from different ages. The males all use about seven and two
hours
on
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of
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paid employment and a half
hours
on
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of
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housework per
day
. And married women all spend about ten
hours
of their
day
working even though, the younger wives spend a bit more
time
doing housework, and the older ones spend a bit more on their jobs. But the differences between both genders
is
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are
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quite noticeable: the male partners spend more
time
on their professions than their wives, whilst women use a larger proportion of their
day
doing housework and working in general.
Overall
, the
time
spent on different types of work does not vary between people of the same gender despite the change
of
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their age; and women spend more
time
caring,
although
their partners spend more
time
in their professions.
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