You have a suggestion for a park near your apartment building. Write a letter to your city's council board. In your letter: Describe who you are and what your suggestion is Explain why you think this suggestion will improve the park Detail when you would like to see this suggestion in action Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Councilor,

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Dear Councilor, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the

park

which is near the apartment. I think some of my suggestions might be helpful to you. I can see the

park

is getting less crowded nowadays. I am John a cooperative member of the society council. As I saw a few days ago the

park

is not in good condition,

moreover

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the

park

is littered with dirt and garbage. As it is a children's

park

, there has a slide, a swing and

see- saw

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for the children to play.

Furthermore

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I would like you to suggest there has to be a

club house

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for the youngsters to play indoor games.

This

will help people to refresh their minds and they will not feel bored at home. ,

Additionally

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there have to be more chairs in the garden for the senior people to sit,

Besides

there have to be more trees in the garden so that I would look beautiful and that attracts more children and in the same way it will help the environment. I would like you to take a look at the garden and consider my suggestion.

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if you feel some of my suggestion is good, please feel free to speak. ,

Secondly

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we can

also

arrange a meeting for the

park

with other members for more suggestions. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, John

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

231 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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