You have a suggestion for a park near your apartment building. Write a letter to your city's council board. In your letter: Describe who you are and what your suggestion is Explain why you think this suggestion will improve the park Detail when you would like to see this suggestion in action Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Councilor,

Dear Councilor, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the
park
which is near the apartment. I think some of my suggestions might be helpful to you. I can see the
park
is getting less crowded nowadays. I am John a cooperative member of the society council. As I saw a few days ago the
park
is not in good condition,
moreover
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the
park
is littered with dirt and garbage. As it is a children's
park
, there has a slide, a swing and
see- saw
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for the children to play.
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I would like you to suggest there has to be a
club house
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for the youngsters to play indoor games.
This
will help people to refresh their minds and they will not feel bored at home. ,
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there have to be more chairs in the garden for the senior people to sit,
Besides
there have to be more trees in the garden so that I would look beautiful and that attracts more children and in the same way it will help the environment. I would like you to take a look at the garden and consider my suggestion.
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if you feel some of my suggestion is good, please feel free to speak. ,
Secondly
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we can
also
arrange a meeting for the
park
with other members for more suggestions. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, John
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