Congestion is a huge problem. Why does it happen? How can it be tackled?

A generation ago,
people
have big space for living.
However
, jam is a big trouble.
This
essay will look at the core reasons for
this
and propose some solid solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
is that the population is getting more and more. By ,
this
I mean births and long lives.
For example
, families are more crowded. they have 2 or 3 children,
Also
humans live long. The solution is for
people
could use birth protection. Another
problem
is that those who want to find work, have to move to the city.
That is
to say, there is not much opportunity in rural areas.
For
this
reason,
people
prefer to go to big
cities
. To tackle
this
issue, the government should support businesses all over the country. A third cause of the
problem
is the wrong constructions. To be more precise, there are lots of buildings in the
cities
which means they are not properly planned so the land loses so many areas.
As a result
, most places do have not enough living spaces. The way forward could be to organise
cities
' buildings and roads for public use.
To sum up
, a big dispute is congestion,
due to
the reasons
such
as births, not enough jobs and construction.
This
is a serious
problem
, and unless we could do birth control, support new businesses and create more systematical
cities
. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
problem
lies with the
people
and the government.
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