The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given process details how
sugar
is manufactured from sugarcanes
.
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sugarcane
Overall
, a total of seven steps is
seen from the production, including harvesting, crushing and separating. It is Correct subject-verb agreement
are
also
evident that manufacturing sugar
from sugarcanes
is a capital-intensive process, despite using only one ingredient.
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sugarcane
To begin
, sugar
canes take 1 to 1.5 years to grow before they are ready for harvest. This
stage could be performed in two different methods, either manually using a sickle or by an industrial reaper.
Once collected, the sugar
canes are machine-pressed in order to extract the juice. This
juice is then
passed through a filter made of limestone so that any unwanted substance is eliminated.
The next stage involves evaporation, in which the filtered sugar
cane juice is put under heat and therefore
thickens into a syrup. Subsequently
, the syrup is transferred into a centrifuge, which rotates at a very high speed so that sugar
crystals are separated from the liquid due to
differences in density. In the final step, the sugar
is dried and cooled, ready for packaging and sale.Submitted by cathyngo1512 on
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