The chart presents the information about the shift in the proportion of elderly population.

The chart presents information about the shift in the proportion of the elderly population

that is

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aged 65 and above in Canada, Germany, and

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the UK

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. It

also

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predicts the change that will have been seen by 2030. In brief, the

percentage

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of the elderly will have increased more and more.

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Canada was the

country

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that has the most

percentage

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of the elderly that has been added to their

country

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each year from 1988 to 2030. The

percentage

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of Canada was 16.32 per

cent

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in 1988 and the

percentage

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is predicted that will have risen up to 26.35 per

cent

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in 2030 which is risen up a lot.

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, Germany had the most elderly people in their

country

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with 20.45 per

cent

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in 1988 and 30.42 per

cent

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in 2030.

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The UK

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is predicted to have fewer elderly people in their

country

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with 14.23 and 20.35 per

cent

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from 1988 to 2030.

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