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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selectng and reporting the man features, and makee comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selectng and reporting the man features, and makee comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
American
households
 by their five different
categories
 of annual salary in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the average
American
households
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household
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 had the highest annual
income
.
Moreover
, there
was
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were
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 no significant differences
of
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in
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 annual salary
categories
 in
three
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the three
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 reported years. Looking at the details, in 2007, 25 million
of
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apply
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US
households
 earned less than $25,000, and the number of US
citizen
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citizens
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 who got $25,000-$49,999
higher
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was higher
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 than
previous
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in previous
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categories
 at around 27
millions
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million
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of
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people.
Moreover
,
American
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Americans
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 who got $50,000 to $99,000 less than
two
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the two
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 previous
categories
.
In addition
, in 2011, most US
households
 got
yearly
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a yearly
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income
at
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of
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 $25,000-$49,999.
Furthermore
, there was almost
similar
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a similar
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 number of
American
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Americans
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 who earned the lowest
income
 and the highest
income
 in
this
 year.
Finally
, the number of people who earned the highest
income
categories
 rose to around 33 million
of
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apply
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people in 2015.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words american, households, categories, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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