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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinon.

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some university pupils that adding other
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main
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the main
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subjects
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 are required. Meanwhile, others think that it is more significant to put their focus and
time
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 to learn for a qualification.
This
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 essay will elaborate both views and I believe that it depends on what career
students
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 want to choose for their future. On the one hand, studying another subject in the university helps
student
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students
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 to expand their knowledge in other fields. It assists
students
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becoming
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 generalist people; it means that they will understand several areas but
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 understanding.
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, it
also
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 helps
students
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 who want to
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 for their future job.
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, MIT and Harvard
students
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 can
study
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 in both universities for some elective modules,
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 as engineering pupils
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 MIT may learn one module
business
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, focusing energy and
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 to learn primary
subjects
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 is more pivotal for some qualifications. Medical
students
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 for
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 case, it is because they have to
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 lots of theories and
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 most cases in their resident
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.
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, it is hard for them to allocate their
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 to
learn
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 other
subjects
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.
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, medical
students
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 in Indonesia need five years to finish their
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study
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studies
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 to
becoma
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become
 a general doctor and
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 continue four years
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study
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of study
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 to become a specialist.
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, they use all their
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 to
study
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,
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practice, and
to
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finish their assignment to learn one particular area.
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, learning
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an additional
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 subject is good for
students
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 who want to expand their knowledge in other areas and want
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to become
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 a generalist.
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, paying attention
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 a main area is more efficient for a particular major
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 as
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the medical
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 field.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Holistic education
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Flexibility
  • Adaptability
  • Specialization
  • Mastery
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Job markets
  • Career advancement
  • Qualifications
  • Time management
  • Focused expertise
  • Practical relevance
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