The diagram shows how chocolate is produced

The diagram shows how chocolate is produced
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The picture gives information about different steps in the process of manufacturing
chocolate
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. Looking from an
overall
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perspective,
it is clear that
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there are a total of around 10 steps in the process of producing
chocolate
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which can be grouped into two main stages, beginning with growing a cacao tree and ending with producing
chocolate
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. The process commences when The cacao tree is grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia and the pods are ripe for harvest when they turn red.
Afterwards
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the pods are split and the white cocoa beans are fermented under leaves before spreading in the sun to dry. The next stage is putting in the large sacks and transporting
by
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train or lorry to take to the factory. Turning to the other steps, cacao beans are roasted at the temperature of 350 degrees.
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, the beans are crushed and removed from their outer shell. In the final stage,
this
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inner part is pressed and the
chocolate
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is produced.
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