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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates information about the recycling of four materials (
paper
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 and
cardboard
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,
glass
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containers
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,
aluminium
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cans
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 and plastics) in percentages, the statistic is provided in
8 time
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8-time
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 groups, from 1982 to 2010.
Overall
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,
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paper
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the paper
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 and
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cardboard's
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cardboard
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 rate of remaking was the highest (around 70%),
while
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 the amount of recycled
paper
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 was dramatically low (
near
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nearly
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 5%).
Also
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, half of
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glass
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the glass
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containers
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 were reused and the sector of
aluminium
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cans
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 changed a lot (from 5%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the research to 45%
in
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at
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 the end) In
details
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detail
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,
paper
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 and
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cardboard's
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cardboard
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 statistic first was not steady,
however
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, after 1994
is
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it
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 started gradually falling. With regard to
paper
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 and
cardboard
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, the
percent
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per cent
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 of
glass
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containers
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' recycling was 
also
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 first unstable and
than
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then
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 steady.
Nevertheless
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, from 1994 the percentage of remade
glass
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containers
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 started raising. The amount of remade plastics and
aluminium
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cans
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was
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were
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 similar,
however
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,
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aluminium
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the aluminium
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cans'
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cans
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 sector was raising dramatically (by 5%
each
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every
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 4 years),
while
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plastics
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the plastics
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 situation did not change a lot.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, glass, containers, aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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