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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates information about the recycling of four materials (
paper
 and
cardboard
,
glass
containers
,
aluminium
cans
 and plastics) in percentages, the statistic is provided in
8 time
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8-time
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 groups, from 1982 to 2010.
Overall
,
paper
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the paper
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 and
cardboard's
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cardboard
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 rate of remaking was the highest (around 70%),
while
 the amount of recycled
paper
 was dramatically low (
near
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nearly
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 5%).
Also
, half of
glass
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the glass
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containers
 were reused and the sector of
aluminium
cans
 changed a lot (from 5%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the research to 45%
in
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at
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 the end) In
details
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detail
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,
paper
 and
cardboard's
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cardboard
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 statistic first was not steady,
however
, after 1994
is
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it
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 started gradually falling. With regard to
paper
 and
cardboard
, the
percent
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per cent
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 of
glass
containers
' recycling was 
also
 first unstable and
than
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then
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 steady.
Nevertheless
, from 1994 the percentage of remade
glass
containers
 started raising. The amount of remade plastics and
aluminium
cans
was
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were
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 similar,
however
,
aluminium
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the aluminium
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cans'
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cans
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 sector was raising dramatically (by 5%
each
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every
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 4 years),
while
plastics
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the plastics
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 situation did not change a lot.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, glass, containers, aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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