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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts depict the information associated with people born in Australia and in other countries.
Overall
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, it has been observed that people born in Australian
cities
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,
towns
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, and rural
areas
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 with people born outside Australian
cities
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,
towns
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, and rural
areas
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 from 1995 to 2010. To start with, population
growth
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 in
cities
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 in 1995 is almost more than 40 per
cent
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.
While
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 in
towns
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 the figure for newborn babies is not exceeded by 20 per
cent
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 in Australia.
Whereas
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 rural
areas
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 as compared to
towns
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 show a slightly higher percentage of around 30 per
cent
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 in 1995. But in 2010
cities
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areas
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 statistics show an increase in the
growth
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 of newborn babies by more than 60 percent.
However
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, the
towns
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 and rural
areas
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 percentage are at the same level of less than 20 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, outside Australia, these figures are totally different in 1995 which is 60 per
cent
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 of newborn babies in
cities
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.
However
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, the town’s population
growth
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 rate is less than 20 per
cent
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, and the rural
areas
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' rate is 40 per
cent
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. In 2010, there is no change comes in the
cities
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' population
growth
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 it is stagnant at 60 % but
the
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in the
show examples
towns
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 and rural
areas
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 birth rate decreases by 10 to 5 per
cent
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, towns, areas, growth, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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