You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. While many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

The topic of whether

government

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the government

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should pay for

retirees

are

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is

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controversiol

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controversial

and causing issues in many countries all around the world. I've come out with several opinions

as well as

some

knowledges

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knowledge

pieces of knowledge

bits of knowledge

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, with relevant examples to support my statements. Providing

money

directly to

retirees

is not

a

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an

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apporpriate

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appropriate

option.

Retirees

without good

money

managing

knowledges

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knowledge

pieces of knowledge

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would waste those funds privided on

unnecesary

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unnecessary

items or activities, causing a bigger financial

loop hole

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loophole

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which required more financial

aids

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aid

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to solve.

This

issue has been proven in

socialist

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a socialist

the socialist

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country

such

as North Korea, where

government

aids promotes laziness to their people and reduce competition

among

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in

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their society,

and

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apply

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further

reduce

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reducing

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their

country

's

productivicty

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productivity

.

However

, it is somehow selfish to people who think they

should'nt

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shouldn't

aid the

retirees

. A clear example

on

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of

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this

can be seen in

capitalist

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a capitalist

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country

such

as the United States, where

the

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apply

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veteran

wasn't receives

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didn't receive

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enough

supports

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support

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from the

government

,and

forced

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are forced

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to live

homeless

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homelessly

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.

Besides

, the plan of saving up

money

for

retirement

might be

interupted

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interrupted

by unexpected events,

such

as medical payments, children's tuition fees or etc. It is

also

inhumane to reject people who

needs

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need

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helps.

Moreover

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,Moreover

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retirees

are considered

as

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a

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weaker

groups

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group

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of

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in

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our society as most of them already lost the ability to work and some of them would even need serious medical

attentions

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attention

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, which could be costly in

long

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the long

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term. In my opinion,

government

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the government

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are not obliged to financially support the

retirees

in our

country

. In order to overcome

this

issue,

government

actions or

statues

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statutes

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should be set up, to make sure the

citizens

are able to save up sufficient

amount

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amounts

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of

money

to prepare for their

retirements

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retirement

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. State actions

such

a

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as

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deduction

a

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of a

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small portion of

citizens

' income, and

save

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saving

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it in a saving account for their

up coming

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upcoming

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retirement

.

An

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A

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successful example regarding

this

opinion can be seen in Malaysia, where 10% of

Malaysian's

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Malaysia's

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income will be deducted upon

receving

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receiving

,

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apply

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and deposited in a

state controlled

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state-controlled

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saving agency. The

citizens

will only allow to use it after their

retirement

. The

government

can

also

funds

the

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apply

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public hospitals and clinics, to improve the medical quality and services of our local medical centre. In

this

case, the

retirees

would able to enjoy a better quality of medical treatment with the same amount of

money

they pay for.

This

has

also

been proven in Malaysia, where their

citizens

would only need to pay 2 Ringgits Malaysia in order to access full medical

treatements

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treatments

treatment

at their local public hospitals and clinics. In conclusion, the

government

should'nt

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shouldn't

giving

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give

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money

directly to

the

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apply

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retirees

as

such

action

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an action

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could promote laziness.

Such

action could

also

increase the financial burden of the

country

, causing

government

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the government

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to reduce the budgets from other sources in order to continue their funding towards the

retirees

, which is unfair to

other group

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another group

other groups

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of

citizens

.

Nevertheless

, the interests of

retirees

should be

taking

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taken

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care of as they are

also

part of the

country

, and they contributed to the

country

as well before their

retirement

. State officials should seek a balance when providing assistance, and overcome issues

with

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in

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as proportionate ways as possible.